Revisions of Article One

In my recent article I wrote about a fellow classmate, Chrystal Phillips.  The article i wrote was a straight forward piece about her life in her own words.  To make my article better, there was two sentences I read that did not make since.  This could be why I received an 83.  I followed the AP style book.  Next time I plan to read my article, countless times before turning the final copy in.